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#1 Billybobjoe

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Posted 25 May 2008 - 12:13 PM

Well, here it is, this is part 1, issue #1:




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#2 Fortiest of all K's

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Posted 25 May 2008 - 12:20 PM

Ooooo, random explosions and deaths! Yummy!
A little more work on the spelling though, it's Illegal not Illeagle.

Did I sign up for this? *goes to check sign-up topic*

EDIT: Apparently not, so I did.

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#3 Sir_Muffonious

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Posted 25 May 2008 - 12:48 PM

The effects could be better, but other than that, it's good. It's hard to really make out a plot yet, but it's only the first episode. Hopefully the plot will tihcken, yes?

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#4 Hawk

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Posted 25 May 2008 - 12:52 PM

To be honest this was rather confusing, I sort of felt lost at the beginning, and it felt like things were moving too fast. sad.gif

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#5 Ansuz

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Posted 25 May 2008 - 03:08 PM

To be honest Hawk, you're confused at the best of times, correct? biggrin.gif

Good start, BBJ. The effects might need a little work, and some places could do with a bit of onomatopoeia (Boom, bang, crash, e.t.c) and some pictoral elaboration (More pics so we can see what's going on, i.e. the grenade, if there was one, and a front on pic of the gun being shot/the guy being hit, instead of just "You shot him") but i'm hardly in a position to complain. I'll be waiting for the first plot cookie to see what happens. I LOVE PLOT COOKIES!!!

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#6 Billybobjoe

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Posted 25 May 2008 - 11:42 PM

Well Ansuz is right, this is the best tme to be confused. I haven't made a comic in a long time (august was the last chapter of TPB) and rushed the sets a little. I'll try to update weekly.

This is part 1: Issue 1, part 2 will focus on Braskir and other mercs, expets 3 parts per chapter on average.
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#7 Billybobjoe

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Posted 28 May 2008 - 10:08 AM

I'm so sorry, I canceling this comic sad.gif. I rushed the first chapter, and didn't really like were it was going.
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#8 Sir_Muffonious

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Posted 28 May 2008 - 10:11 AM

ACK! *Falls off chair and dies*

*Phoenix down*

What?! Why? Just redo the first chapter the way you want to. Don't cancel the comic altogether.

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#9 Billybobjoe

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Posted 28 May 2008 - 10:35 AM

I'm just not feeling it, you know? This comic feels more like a chore than something I want to do.
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#10 Fortiest of all K's

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Posted 28 May 2008 - 08:30 PM

QUOTE (Billybobjoe @ May 29 2008, 10:40 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I'm just not feeling it, you know? This comic feels more like a chore than something I want to do.


So does CvV, but I still do it. Well, saying that, I haven't updated in a while...

Basically, just make it shorter, like 5 issues or something.

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